Translate 心灵创造幸福; bump toolkit (语气 guidance)
Article from jiqun.com id=213. source.dj/target.dj at 179-line parity; bilingual.dj generated locally (not committed). Terminology verified against terms DB; decisions and open points in edit-suggestions.dj. Toolkit bump brings in speaker's-voice (语气) guidance applied in this translation.
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# Edit suggestions — 心灵创造幸福
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Terminology and consistency notes flagged for reviewer attention.
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## Terminology decisions (all verified against terms DB)
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- 心灵创造幸福 → *The Mind Creates Happiness*
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- 三法印 → the Three Dharma Seals (佛教术语, loc 心灵创造幸福)
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- 诸行无常 → all conditioned phenomena are impermanent (BAICKZ)
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- 《杂阿含经》 → the Samyuktagama (佛教术语/经论名, loc 心灵创造幸福). Note: DoT定稿 renders 《杂阿含经》 as "The Numerical Discourses of the Buddha" — that is the Anguttara Nikaya correspondence, not Samyuktagama. Article-specific entry used instead.
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- 两支毒箭 → two poisoned arrows (DoT初步)
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- 五福临门 → the Five Blessings descend upon this home; 康宁 → health and peace; 好德 → virtue; 善终 → a good death (佛教术语, loc 心灵创造幸福)
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- 善逝 → the Well-Gone One; 预知时至 → foresee one's time of death; 坐脱立亡 → pass away gracefully at one's own command, seated or standing (佛教术语)
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- 悲田 / 恩田 / 敬田 → the field of compassion / gratitude / respect (佛教术语, loc 心灵创造幸福)
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- 断德 / 智德 / 悲德 → the virtue of cessation / wisdom / compassion (佛教术语 + DoT定稿)
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- 贪嗔痴 → greed, hatred, and ignorance (BAICKZ majority; DB also has "delusion" — kept "ignorance" for consistency with 无明 → ignorance)
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- 勤修戒定慧,息灭贪嗔痴 → diligently practice the precepts, concentration, and wisdom to extinguish greed, hatred, and ignorance (偈颂经文名言, 传承国学)
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- 《金刚经》quote → DB 偈颂经文名言 version: "All conditioned phenomena are like dreams, illusions, bubbles, shadows, like dewdrops and a lightning flash. Contemplate them thus."
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- 念佛是谁 → "Who is actually reciting the Buddha's name?" (偈颂经文名言, loc 心灵创造幸福)
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- 本来面目 → original face; 心猿意马 → a mind like a capering monkey and a galloping horse; 举身微笑 → full-body smile; 知足常乐 → contentment brings happiness; 觉性 → awakened nature; 魔性 → demonic nature (all 佛教术语, loc 心灵创造幸福)
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- 塞翁失马 / 祸兮福之所倚 quotes → DB 偈颂经文名言 versions verbatim
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- 临终关怀 → hospice care; 《易经》 → the Book of Changes; 水中捞月 → scoop the moon out of the water
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## Open points for reviewer
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1. 福报 rendered as "blessings" throughout (DB also has "karmic reward", "merits"). "Blessings" keeps the 福 linkage with 幸福/五福 readable for a lay audience.
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2. 闽南人喝功夫茶 → "gongfu tea in Minnan" — kept the regional reference; consider "southern Fujian" if Minnan is too obscure.
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3. 胡润百富 → the Hurun Rich List (not in DB; standard media rendering).
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4. 明心见性 → "illuminate the mind and see its true nature" (literal Chan idiom) rather than DB's "realize the Buddha-nature within oneself", which would pre-empt the next section's 佛性 discussion.
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## Voice (语气) notes
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Per updated skill guidance, deliberately preserved: rhetorical questions as questions throughout; first-person teacher asides (我经常说 / 我曾在讲座中 / 我曾在微博 / 由此我想到); reasoning connectives (可见 → "clearly / so we can see", 所以说 → "so / that is why"); inclusive we/you address; homely analogies kept concrete (apple, leaking boat, teacup, mask).
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