revise 人生百问
proofread 佛教徒的人生态度
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- title: 英文部分起始位置异常
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location: PDF 第 96 页 / 全书结构
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original: PDF 第 96 页仍为中文正文（内页码 92），英文标题页实际从 PDF 第 101 页开始，中间 PDF 第 100 页为空白页（仅含
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InDesign 导出页脚）。
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suggestion: 确认是否应删除 PDF 第 100 页空白页，使英文部分从 PDF 第 96 页开始；或更新封面/前言说明。
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type: formatting
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priority: Critical
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notes: 与计划预期“英文从 PDF 页 96 开始”不符，需排版确认。
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- title: InDesign 导出页脚未清除
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location: 全书每一页底部
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original: 每页底部保留 “3-43佛教徒的人生态度-改字号.indd N 2026/7/11 …” 或 “佛教徒的人生态度-改版面 二校 0628.indd
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N 2026/7/8 …” 等 InDesign 导出信息。
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suggestion: 删除所有页面底部的 InDesign 文件名与导出时间戳页脚，保留正式页码（如有）或留空。
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type: formatting
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priority: Critical
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notes: 影响成书质量。
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- title: 英文第四章标题与英文引言不一致
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location: PDF 第 103 页（英文目录）/ 第 165 页（正文标题）/ 第 105 页（引言）
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original: IV Focus on Life or on Death（目录与正文）；引言中为 “Cherish life or face death?”
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suggestion: 统一为 **Cherish Life or Face Death**，以与英文引言及中文“重生还是重死”对应。
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type: bilingual
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priority: Major
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notes: ''
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- title: 缺少系动词 is
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location: PDF 第 122 页（内页码 118），Section III, chapter 3, paragraph 2
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original: Good deeds, no matter how great or small, should be done whenever possible—according
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to one’s ability, strength, and circumstances. This spirit exemplified by Avalokitesvara
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Bodhisattva, who “responds to every prayer and serves as a guiding vessel in the
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sea of suffering.”
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suggestion: This spirit **is** exemplified by Avalokitesvara Bodhisattva...
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type: grammar
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priority: Major
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notes: ''
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- title: 代词错误 their → our
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location: PDF 第 155 页（内页码 151），Section III, chapter 2, paragraph 3
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original: The more we acquire, the stronger **their** fear of losing it becomes.
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suggestion: The more we acquire, the stronger **our** fear of losing it becomes.
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type: grammar
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priority: Major
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notes: Pronoun shift; subject has been “we.”
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- title: 逗号粘连/流水句
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location: PDF 第 162 页（内页码 158），Section III, chapter 2, paragraph 3
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original: Similarly, our demands for better housing have grown rapidly, even in
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developing economies such as China, real estate development remains unchecked.
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suggestion: Similarly, our demands for better housing have grown rapidly. **Even
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in** developing economies such as China, real estate development remains unchecked.（或插入
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“and”）
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type: grammar
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priority: Major
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notes: Run-on / comma splice; second clause is not subordinate.
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- title: 涅槃术语不标准
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location: PDF 第 170 页（内页码 166），Section IV, chapter 1, paragraph 2
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original: nirvana has two aspects—‘complete nirvana’ and ‘incomplete nirvana.’
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suggestion: nirvana has two aspects—**nirvana with remainder** and **nirvana without
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remainder**.（或 “non-final nirvana” / “final nirvana”）
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type: terminology
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priority: Major
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notes: 有余涅槃 / 无余涅槃的标准英译。
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- title: 拼写错误 absorded → absorbed
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location: PDF 第 173 页（内页码 169），Section IV, chapter 2, subsection 1
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original: the heavenly beings are only **absorded** in pleasures
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suggestion: the heavenly beings are only **absorbed** in pleasures
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type: content/spelling
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priority: Major
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notes: ''
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- title: 人生佛教译法应为 Buddhism for Human Life
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location: PDF 第 177 页（内页码 173）/ 第 178 页（内页码 174），Section IV, chapter 3
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original: Master Taixu (1890–1947) advocated “Buddhism of Human Life,” ... / “Buddhism
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of Human Life aims to interpret …”
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suggestion: Master Taixu advocated “**Buddhism for Human Life**,” … / “Buddhism
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for Human Life aims to interpret …”
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type: terminology
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priority: Major
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notes: MPI 术语规范：人生佛教 = Buddhism for Human Life；勿与人间佛教 Humanistic Buddhism 混淆。
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- title: 介词搭配错误 about → for
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location: PDF 第 189 页（内页码 185），Section V, introduction
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original: show no care **about** the suffering of the world
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suggestion: show no care **for** the suffering of the world
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type: grammar
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priority: Major
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notes: Care for 为标准搭配。
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- title: 术语不标准 self-deliverers → self-liberators
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location: PDF 第 198 页（内页码 194），Section V, chapter 3, subsection 2
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original: This is why they are sometimes called ‘**self-deliverers**,’ as if they
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care only about their own liberation and ignore the world’s suffering.
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suggestion: This is why they are sometimes called ‘**self-liberators**’ (or ‘those
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who seek their own liberation’), …
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type: terminology
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priority: Major
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notes: 自了汉 / 自度者的标准英译。
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- title: 主谓一致（attitudes 复数）
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location: PDF 第 209 页（内页码 205），Section VI, chapter 1, paragraph 1
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original: Our attitudes toward the world **is** commonly known as our worldview.
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suggestion: Our **attitude** toward the world **is** commonly known as our worldview.（与中文“对世界的态度”单数一致）
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type: grammar
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priority: Major
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notes: 中文为单数，英文用 attitudes 复数与 is 不一致。
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- title: Avalokitesvara vs Avalokiteshvara 拼写不一致
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location: PDF 第 216 页（内页码 212）
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original: 同页出现 “Avalokitesvara” 与 “Avalokiteshvara” 两种拼写。
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suggestion: 统一拼写；推荐按 MPI 术语规范改为 **Guanyin Bodhisattva**（中文为“观音菩萨”），或至少统一为 Avalokitesvara。
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type: terminology
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priority: Major
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notes: 同一页两种拼写。
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- title: 术语 awkward：无缘大慈、同体大悲
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location: PDF 第 218 页（内页码 214），Section VI, chapter 3, paragraph 2
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original: Another expression of great loving-kindness and great compassion is ‘unconditional
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great loving-kindness and compassion of shared unity.’
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suggestion: Another expression of great loving-kindness and great compassion is
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‘unconditional great compassion and the great sympathy of seeing others as oneself.’
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type: terminology
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priority: Major
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notes: 中文 无缘大慈、同体大悲 的标准英译。
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- title: 关联词不完整 not only … and … → not only … but also …
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location: PDF 第 229 页（内页码 225），Section VII, chapter 3, subsection 1
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original: Monastics should cultivate pure and untainted emotions **not only** toward
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the Three Jewels, their teachers, and fellow practitioners, **and should also**
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develop compassion for all sentient beings.
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suggestion: Monastics should cultivate pure and untainted emotions **not only**
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toward the Three Jewels, their teachers, and fellow practitioners, **but also**
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develop compassion for all sentient beings.
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type: grammar
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priority: Major
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notes: ''
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- title: 语法错误 in reversed → reversed / in reverse
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location: PDF 第 237 页（内页码 233），Section VIII, chapter 2, subsection 1
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original: I often write the phrase ‘adapt to conditions, embody no-self,’ or sometimes
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**in reversed**, ‘embody no-self, adapt to conditions.’
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suggestion: …or sometimes **reversed**, ‘embody no-self, adapt to conditions.’（或
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“in reverse”）
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type: grammar
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priority: Major
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notes: ''
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- title: 中文第七章标题与引言不一致，影响英文对应
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location: PDF 第 5 页（中文引言）/ 第 81 页（中文正文标题）/ 第 221 页（英文标题）
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original: 中文引言“无情还是大爱”；中文正文标题“七、无情还是多情”；英文 VII To Love or Not to Love（对应引言）
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suggestion: 二选一：将中文正文标题与引言统一为“无情还是大爱”（推荐，与英文一致）；或将英文标题改为对应“无情还是多情”的译法。
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type: bilingual
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priority: Major
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notes: 需编辑定夺。
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- title: 英文标题页元素待确认（布局选择）
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location: PDF 第 101 页（英文标题页）
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original: 英文标题页缺少丛书名、双语标识、出版社；作者仅列 “Master Jiqun” 未加 by。
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suggestion: 如要求与中文封面镜像，添加 The Mindful Peace Academy Collection、Chinese-English Edition、出版社英文名及
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by；如为 intentional 设计则保持。
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type: formatting/bilingual
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priority: Minor
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notes: 待排版确认。
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- title: 英文目录罗马数字后缺句点
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location: PDF 第 103 页（内页码 99），Table of contents
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original: I Passive or Proactive, II Pessimism or Optimism, III Abstinence or Indulgence,
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IV Focus on Life or on Death, V Benefit Oneself or Benefit Others …
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suggestion: I. Passive or Proactive, II. Pessimism or Optimism, III. Abstinence
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or Indulgence, IV. Focus on Life or on Death, V. Benefit Oneself or Benefit Others
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…
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type: formatting
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priority: Minor
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notes: 罗马数字在标题中通常加句点。
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- title: 首字下沉 L iving 空格异常
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location: PDF 第 105 页（内页码 101），Body opening paragraph
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original: L iving in this world, we have our own views on life …
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suggestion: Living in this world, we have our own views on life …
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type: formatting
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priority: Minor
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notes: 首字下沉后多余空格导致单词分裂。
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- title: 缺少所有格/冠词 keep distance
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location: PDF 第 106 页（内页码 102），Section I, introduction
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original: Due to these misconceptions, many people **keep distance** from Buddhism,
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fearing that embracing the faith would strip away life’s pleasures or make them
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seem different from others.
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suggestion: many people **keep a distance** from Buddhism（或 keep their distance
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from Buddhism）
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type: grammar
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priority: Minor
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notes: ''
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- title: 分号后大写 + benefit 单复数
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location: PDF 第 111 页（内页码 107），Section I, chapter 2, paragraph 2
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original: When we are frustrated, it is best to turn inward to cultivate character
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and improve ourselves; **When** we attain success and high position, we should
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step forward to assist virtuous rulers and work for the **benefits** of all.
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suggestion: '...improve ourselves; **when** we attain success and high position,
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... work for the **benefit** of all.'
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type: grammar/punctuation
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priority: Minor
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notes: ''
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- title: 中文数字与量词之间空格
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location: PDF 第 13 页 / 第 41 页 / 第 42 页
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original: 66 岁、80 岁、50 岁、12 倍
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suggestion: 66岁、80岁、50岁、12倍
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type: formatting
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priority: Minor
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notes: 中文排版数字与量词通常连写；如全书统一空格设计则保持。
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- title: 英文第四章 4.2 小标题多冠词 the
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location: PDF 第 173 页（内页码 169），Section IV, chapter 2, subsection 1
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original: 2. Buddhism Focuses on **the** Real Life
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suggestion: 2. Buddhism Focuses on Real Life（或 This Real Life）
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type: bilingual/grammar
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priority: Minor
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notes: ''
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- title: Sutra → Sutta 术语规范
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location: PDF 第 180 页（内页码 176），Section IV, chapter 2, subsection 5
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original: the **Sigalovada Sutra** and the Sutra on the Ten Wholesome Ways of Action
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suggestion: the **Sigalovada Sutta** and the Sutra on the Ten Wholesome Ways of
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Action
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type: terminology
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priority: Minor
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notes: Pali 经典通称 Sigālovāda Sutta。
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- title: 缺少定冠词/名词 people：Ancient Chinese
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location: PDF 第 193 页（内页码 189），Section V, chapter 3, subsection 2
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original: '**Ancient Chinese** valued honest business—offering genuine goods at
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fair prices and deceiving neither the old nor the young—for only in this way could
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one win the trust of others.'
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suggestion: '**The ancient Chinese** valued honest business...（或 Ancient Chinese
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people valued...）'
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type: grammar
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priority: Minor
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notes: ''
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- title: The Lamrim 用法 awkward
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location: PDF 第 202 页（内页码 198），Section V, chapter 3, subsection 2
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original: '**The Lamrim** teaches that …'
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suggestion: '**Lamrim** teaches that … 或 **The Lamrim teachings** teach that …'
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type: terminology/formatting
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priority: Minor
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notes: ''
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- title: 多余逗号 even more so, wisdom → even more so wisdom
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location: PDF 第 203 页（内页码 199），Section V, chapter 3, subsection 2
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original: we need compassion, but **even more so, wisdom**.
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suggestion: we need compassion, but **even more so wisdom**.
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type: grammar/punctuation
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priority: Minor
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notes: ''
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- title: Take the parent-child relationship for example 语序 awkward
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location: PDF 第 205 页（内页码 201），Section V, chapter 3, subsection 4
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original: Take the parent-child relationship **for example**.
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suggestion: '**Take, for example, the parent-child relationship.**'
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type: grammar
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priority: Minor
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notes: for example 后置不够地道，前置更顺。
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- title: Bodhicitta 大小写不一致
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location: PDF 第 216 页（内页码 212），Section VI, chapter 3, paragraph 1
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original: cultivate not just the mind of renunciation but also **Bodhicitta**
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suggestion: cultivate not just the mind of renunciation but also **bodhicitta**
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type: formatting
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priority: Minor
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notes: 文中其余处均小写。
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- title: 缺少定冠词/名词 people：Ancient Chinese
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location: PDF 第 222 页（内页码 218），Section VII, chapter 1, paragraph 1
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original: '**Ancient Chinese** valued “cognition,” “emotion,” and “intention.”'
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suggestion: '**The ancient Chinese** valued “cognition,” “emotion,” and “intention.”（或
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Ancient Chinese people valued...）'
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type: grammar
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priority: Minor
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notes: ''
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- title: 逗号粘连：It is active, not passive, definite, not ambiguous
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location: PDF 第 238 页（内页码 234），Section VIII, chapter 2, subsection 1
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original: It is active, not passive, definite, not ambiguous.
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suggestion: It is active, not passive**;** definite, not ambiguous.（或 It is active
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rather than passive, definite rather than ambiguous.）
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type: grammar/punctuation
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priority: Minor
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notes: ''
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- title: 同一引文出现两个版本
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location: PDF 第 24 页（第 2 章）与 PDF 第 78 页（第 6 章）
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original: p.24 “出家乃大丈夫事，非将相所能为。”；p.78 “出家乃大丈夫之事，非将相之所能为也。”
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suggestion: 统一为通行版本，例如“出家乃大丈夫之事，非将相之所能为也。”
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type: terminology/content
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priority: Minor
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notes: 待确认。
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- title: 中文目录“目 录”中间空格
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location: PDF 第 3 页（中文目录页）
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original: 【目 录】
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suggestion: 【目录】
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type: formatting
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priority: Minor
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notes: 请确认是否为排版字距；非设计规范应去掉。
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- title: 中文正文分项编号使用半角括号
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location: PDF 第 7 页、第 13 页等（各章小节内分项）
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original: (1) 消极和积极的表现；(2) 消极和积极的产生背景 …
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suggestion: （1）消极和积极的表现；（2）消极和积极的产生背景 …
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type: formatting
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priority: Minor
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notes: 中文标点应使用全角括号，请统一全书。
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- title: 封面/内页页眉、裁切标记
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location: 全书
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original: 页面四角保留印刷裁切标记与对位标记；页眉为“佛教徒的人生态度”或“The Life Attitudes of Buddhists”。
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suggestion: 确认裁切标记是否保留（用于印刷则保留，用于电子阅读则删除）；统一页眉字体/位置。
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type: formatting
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priority: Minor
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notes: 待排版确认。
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