# Edit Suggestions for 70【佛法要领】

Translator: model (self)
Reviewer: model (self)
Date: 2026-08-06

## Summary

Translation is complete and accurate. One proper-name fix applied during review. No
terminology inconsistencies found. Diacritics and Sanskrit terms used consistently
throughout.

## Changes Made

1. **戒幢佛学研究所** — "Jiechuo Buddhist Studies Institute" corrected to "Jiechuang
   Buddhist Studies Institute" per official English name at jcedu.org. (line 673)

## Terminology Notes

Key terms used consistently per MPI terms database (DoT定稿 and 佛教术语 sources):

| Chinese | English | Source |
|---------|---------|--------|
| 出离心 | renunciation | 佛教术语 |
| 菩提心 | bodhicitta | standard convention |
| 空性见 | the view of emptiness | 佛教术语/DoT定稿 |
| 道次第 | the Stages of the Path / Lamrim | standard convention |
| 三主要道 | Three Principal Aspects of the Path | standard convention |
| 皈依 | refuge / taking refuge | standard convention |
| 发心 | aspiration | standard convention |
| 止观 | śamatha-vipaśyanā | standard convention |
| 暇满人身 | precious human life (of leisure and endowment) | contextual |
| 惑业苦 | delusion, karma, and suffering | DoT定稿 |
| 我执 | self-grasping / self-clinging | consistent throughout |
| 缘起 | dependent origination | standard convention |
| 性空 | emptiness of self-nature | standard convention |

## Deliberate Choices

- **Renunciation** rather than "disillusionment" for 出离心 — "renunciation" is the
  standard English Dharma term and matches the intended meaning of active letting-go
  rather than passive disappointment.

- **Precious human life** for 暇满人身 — contextual expansion of "leisure and
  endowment" when the text describes the conditions; the fuller meaning is
  preserved in context.

- **Three Principal Aspects of the Path** (capitalized, italicized for the text
  title) — standard rendering in English Buddhist literature for Tsongkhapa's text.

- Verse translations preserve the single-line-per-verse structure matching the
  source, using em dashes for caesura within verses.

- Chinese Buddhist school names kept in standard romanization (Huayan, Tiantai,
  Chan) rather than translated descriptively.

## Items for External Review

- Sanskrit diacritics used throughout (saṃsāra, śamatha-vipaśyanā, Śrāvaka, etc.).
  Verify against project diacritics convention at
  `../mpi-translation/references/diacritics-convention.md`.

- "Jiechuang Buddhist Studies Institute" — confirm this romanization is the
  project's preferred rendering for 戒幢佛学研究所.