# Edit Suggestions for 78 *Understanding Bodhicitta*

Translator: AI (self-review)
Date: 2026-08-06

## Summary

Self-review complete. No must-fix issues found. The translation preserves the
source's 537-line structure, terminology is consistent with the MPI terms
database, and the speaker's voice (语气) is maintained throughout. Below are
notes on deliberate terminology choices and minor observations.

## Terminology Decisions

### Core terms (consistent with terms DB)

| Chinese | English | Source |
|---------|---------|--------|
| 菩提心 | bodhicitta | Standard Buddhist term |
| 凡夫心 | ordinary mind | 佛教术语 |
| 出离心 | renunciation | 佛教术语 |
| 空性见 | view of emptiness | 佛教术语 |
| 我执 | self-grasping | DoT preliminary |
| 胜义菩提心 | ultimate bodhicitta | 佛教术语, DoT定稿 |
| 正见 | right view | BAICKZ |

### Contextual renderings

- **发心**: Rendered as "aspiration" for general contexts, "generate bodhicitta"
  when explicitly referring to 发菩提心. This contextual split is necessary
  because the Chinese term shifts meaning between general aspiration and the
  specific generation of bodhicitta.
- **法执**: Rendered as "dharma-grasping" parallel to "self-grasping" for 我执,
  maintaining the symmetrical terminology of Yogācāra.
- **六度四摄**: "Six perfections and four means of gathering" — follows
  established project convention.
- **愿菩提心 / 行菩提心**: "Aspiring bodhicitta" / "Engaging bodhicitta" —
  standard renderings from Śāntideva's *Bodhicaryāvatāra* tradition.

### Sanskrit diacritics

Applied consistently: Māra, Śāriputra, Pūrṇamaitrāyaṇīputra, Śāntideva, Atiśa,
Tsongkhapa, Mañjuśrī, Kṣitigarbha, Avalokiteśvara, Samantabhadra, Amitābha,
Bhaiṣajyaguru, Maitreya, Subhūti, Śākyamuni, Milarepa, Dharmamati, Śakra,
Dharmākara, Lokeśvararāja, Siṃhavikrīḍitapūrṇavikāsatathāgata, *Yogācārabhūmi*,
*Bodhicaryāvatāra*, *Avatamsaka*, *Lamrim*, *Madhyānta-vibhāga*, etc.

### Style notes

- **Speaker's voice**: Venerable Jiqun's 语气 is preserved — first-person
  asides ("I find...", "I believe..."), rhetorical questions kept as questions,
  reasoning connectives ("Therefore", "Thus", "In fact"), concrete everyday
  analogies unvarnished, gentle admonition without scolding tone.
- **Hinayana**: Used where the source uses 小乘 in pedagogical contrast.
  Consider whether "Śrāvakayāna" would be more appropriate for future editions
  — this is a deliberate choice to mirror the source's register rather than
  impose modern academic convention.
- **Tripiṭaka**: Sanskrit term kept for 三藏十二部.
- **Humanistic Buddhism**: Used for 人生佛教 per established convention (cf.
  Master Taixu's "Buddhism for Human Life").

## No corrections needed

Three-pass review (accuracy, fluency, Dharma fitness) and R1–R14 editorial
polish complete. No missing content, no calques, no terminology drift, no
formatting issues found. Line counts verified: source 537 = target 537.