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# Translation Findings — 佛教与一带一路 (FINAL)
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All translation issues applied. Pass 3 added flow/tonal fixes.
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## Pass 3 (flow & register fixes)
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### F2 — Prof. Wei's credentials inconsistent (L9, L20)
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- L9 (third-person intro): "Academician of the Chinese Academy of Social Sciences (CASS) and research fellow at the Institute of World Religions"
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- L20 (Sun's intro): "a member of the CASS academic committee" (OLD)
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- Fixed L20: "an Academician of the Chinese Academy of Social Sciences"
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- Now consistent: "Academician" in both.
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### F3 — "Buddhist practitioners ... looked upon with hope" subject error (L197)
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- Source: 佛教都被社会大众赋予期望 (Buddhism is looked to with hope)
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- Old EN: "Buddhist practitioners, both past and present, are looked upon with hope" (substituted practitioners for Buddhism)
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- Fixed: "Buddhism, both past and present, is regarded with hope by the broader society"
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- Also fixed: "as carriers of traditional culture" → "as a carrier" (Buddhism is singular)
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### F4 — "monumental" second occurrence (L129)
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- Source: 恢宏的西行求法运动 (grand westward movement)
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- Fixed: "a monumental westward movement" → "a grand westward movement"
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### F5 — "draw forth" (L237)
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- Source: 得到新的精神资源 (obtain new spiritual resources)
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- Old EN: "draw forth new spiritual resources" (over-formal)
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- Fixed: "draw on new spiritual resources"
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### F6 — "shoulder" (L257)
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- Source: 承担更为重要的作用 (take a more important role)
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- Old EN: "shoulder an even more significant role"
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- Fixed: "take on an even more significant role"
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### F7 — "bring ... into full play" (L265)
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- Source: 发挥人类优势 (bring into play human strengths)
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- Old EN: "bring humanity's strengths into full play" (calque)
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- Fixed: "make the most of human strengths"
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### F8 — "must" / "should" inconsistency in Section V (L281-309)
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- 71, 72, 73 had mix of "should" / "must" / "must" (introduced by 71 fix)
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- Standardized: "should serve as" for all three
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- Kept "must" in 75 ("we must not think") and 77 ("Humanity must live together") — source is 一定要/必须
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### F9 — "look to with hope" (L197)
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- Source: 赋予期望 (entrust with hope)
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- Fixed: "regarded with hope" (more natural)
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## Pass 1-2 fixes (already applied)
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See prior version of this file for full list. Summary:
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- 11 high-severity terminology/calque fixes
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- 3 structural consistency fixes
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- 2 front matter fixes
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- 107 em-dashes not applied (per user)
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## Quality notes
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The piece reads as formal academic-symposium speech. Register is consistent throughout (Sun Yinggang's English voice is more conversational, Wei/Jiqun's is more formal — this matches the source's speaker differentiation). No major tonal drift between sections.
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