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skills/mpi-translation/SKILL.md

@@ -276,6 +276,10 @@ Read the entire English target aloud. If anything stalls, rephrase it.
 
 When translating guided meditation scripts, exercise guides, or posture instructions
 (rather than Dharma talks), use a lighter workflow. See `references/meditation-translation.md`.
+Before drafting, also read `../mpi-translation-review/references/meditation-practice-translation.md`
+(patterns a human reviewer flagged across a meditation manuscript) so the recurring
+issues — dropped/inconsistent person, over-long sentences, filler, 字对字
+renderings, fixed series terms — are avoided up front rather than caught at review.
 
 ## Other Pitfalls
 
@@ -288,6 +292,7 @@ Create article-specific scripts per `references/proofread-pdf-workflow.md`.
 ## References
 
 - `references/meditation-translation.md` — lighter workflow for meditation/mindfulness content
+- `../mpi-translation-review/references/meditation-practice-translation.md` (cross-skill) — recurring patterns for meditation-practice texts, distilled from a human-reviewed manuscript
 - `references/markdown-to-djot.md` — converting .docx.md to .dj for translation prep
 - `references/bilingual-format.md` — bilingual.dj layout: source/target adjacent, blank separator between pairs
 - `references/diacritics-convention.md` — diacritics rules

skills/mpi-translation/references/meditation-translation.md

@@ -7,7 +7,8 @@ use a lighter workflow than the full dharma-translation pipeline.
 ## Register
 
 Default to warm, direct instructional voice (Thầy-adjacent):
-- Second-person address ("you")
+- Inclusive first person ("we") for describing the practice and shared
+  experience; second person ("you") for direct step-by-step guidance
 - Concrete images, sensory details
 - Oral rhythm, short sentences
 - Present tense, imperative mood
@@ -15,6 +16,18 @@ Default to warm, direct instructional voice (Thầy-adjacent):
 MB corpus consultation is NOT needed for register — this content type has its own
 well-established English conventions (yoga/meditation instructional voice).
 
+### Person and subject (most-reviewed issue in this genre)
+
+Chinese meditation prose drops subjects; English must not. The human reviewer's
+#1 fix was to supply and keep a **consistent person as subject** — almost
+always "we" for shared experience, "you" for direct guidance — and never to
+drift into abstract third person ("people," "one") or leave a sentence
+subjectless. Every sentence needs a named subject, and the reference chain
+across sentences must stay consistent (don't hop between "we," "the
+practitioner," and an inanimate noun). For the full pattern library from a
+human-reviewed manuscript, read
+`../mpi-translation-review/references/meditation-practice-translation.md`.
+
 ## Terms
 
 Terms DB lookup for Buddhist-mindfulness vocabulary is useful but limited to key terms: