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# Edit Suggestions — 79【菩提心的修行】
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## Summary
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Translation complete and self-reviewed. Line count matches source. Major structural issues (block quote line counts) resolved via merge script + two manual corrections.
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## Terminology decisions
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| Chinese | English | Notes |
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| 菩提心 | bodhicitta | Standard. "aspiring bodhicitta" for 愿菩提心, "engaging bodhicitta" for 行菩提心 |
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| 出离心 | renunciation | Consistent throughout. 27 occurrences |
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| 空性 / 空性见 / 空性慧 | emptiness / view of emptiness / wisdom of emptiness | Clear distinction maintained |
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| 七支供 | Seven-Limbed Practice | Follows terms DB precedent |
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| 皈依 | refuge | Standard |
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| 菩萨戒 | bodhisattva precepts | Standard |
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| 菩萨行 | bodhisattva practice / bodhisattva conduct | Both used where appropriate; "bodhisattva practice" preferred |
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| 二乘 | the two vehicles | Used when general; śrāvaka/pratyekabuddha when specific |
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| 声闻 | śrāvaka | With diacritics, consistent |
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| 缘觉 / 辟支佛 | pratyekabuddha | With diacritics |
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| 六度 | six pāramitās | Standard |
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| 无我 | selflessness | "no-self" avoided except in quoted context |
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| 无自性 | absence of inherent existence | Chose over "lack of self-nature" for precision |
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| 自他相换 | exchanging self and others | Follows DB |
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| 三聚净戒 | the three pure precepts | Standard |
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| 止观 | śamatha-vipaśyanā | On first use; "calm abiding and special insight" also used |
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| 般若 | prajñā / wisdom | prajñā for the Sanskrit term, wisdom in general contexts |
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## Structural corrections applied
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1. **Block quote lines**: Verses in source use couplets (two half-lines per `>` line). Target initially used one half-line per `>` line, adding 108 extra lines. Merged via script to match source structure.
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2. **Liturgy section headers**: `(VII)` and `(IX)` headers share `>` lines with adjacent verse endings in source (same line). Manually corrected after script merge.
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3. **`**` bold markers**: 8 sub-headings had `**...**` (Markdown bold). Changed to plain text to match source (source has no emphasis on these headings).
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## Remaining observations (non-blocking)
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- **Sanskrit diacritics**: `śrāvaka`, `śamatha`, `vipaśyanā`, `prajñā` use diacritics; `samsara`, `nirvana`, `bodhicitta`, `bodhisattva` do not. Consistent with MPI conventions. `Pāramitā` used once on introduction, then `pāramitās` thereafter.
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- **Sutra quote ellipses**: Source uses `......` for elided scripture; target uses `...`. Acceptable.
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- **TOC anchor links**: Contain Chinese characters (e.g. `(#为什么要发菩提心)`) — these are djot internal anchors, must match source.
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- **No diacritics on Avalokiteśvara, Mañjuśrī, Samantabhadra**: These are proper names found in the reference material. Used consistently.
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## Source context
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- Genre: Dharma talk / transcribed oral teaching (book form)
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- Speaker: Master Jìqún (济群法师)
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- Date: 2007, Second Bodhi Meditation Retreat
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- Register: Measured authority, calm and composed. "We" for shared human condition; "you" for direct address. Rhetorical questions preserved. Everyday analogies kept concrete.
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