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# Deliberation Protocol (审议规程)
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From 东方译场审议手册 (Oriental Translation Review Manual, 2026-03-25).
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Guidance from Ven. Jiqun on translation review culture and process.
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## Core Standards
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1. **Accuracy (准确性)** — primary. Convey content-level meaning, not word-by-word
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correspondence. Deepen accuracy iteratively; grasp the "inner spirit" rather than
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fixating on literal vs free translation.
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2. **Readability (可读性)** — secondary. Fluent sentences, graceful expression. Do
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not pursue endless revision; what is achievable now is the best for now.
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**Test**: invite 5–10 readers to read aloud and give feedback — is it clear or
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obscure? Is it concise? Is the meaning clear?
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## Decision-Making
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When opinions differ:
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- Compare which version is more accurate and more readable
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- Do NOT cling to your own view (不执着于己见)
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- If two people cannot decide, invite 5–10 to read and vote
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- Remember: the translation is for the READERS, not for yourself
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## Core Principle: Rejoice First (随喜)
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Before flagging issues, affirm what is good. Professional translation companies
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emphasize positive feedback to build translator confidence and good collaboration.
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Criticism alone — however precise — breeds resistance and harms the final result.
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In the Oriental Translation Workshop, rejoicing in others' merits cultivates
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sympathetic joy (随喜), compassion, selflessness, and boundless merit — while
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encouraging others' wholesome efforts.
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**Practice**: develop eyes that SEE the merits in a translation. Rejoice with
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genuine gladness. Examples:
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- "So many technical terms and complex logic here — you handled it beautifully!"
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- "This word choice is exactly right."
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- "The prose is so clean and fluid!"
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- "Excellent!" / "Good word choice!"
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## Three Principles for Giving Suggestions
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1. **Lower the self** — use compassionate, gentle, skillful language
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2. **Be diligent and attentive** — find the actual problems
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3. **Tier your suggestions** — make clear what MUST change, what COULD improve,
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and what needs DISCUSSION
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## Three-Tier Issue System
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### Level 1: Spelling, Grammar, Format (拼写、语法、格式)
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**Action**: fix directly, keep tracked changes visible.
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May annotate for translator development:
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- "MPI format uses American English — `toward` not `towards`."
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- "Use `Chan` here, not `Zen`."
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- "MPI format does not use diacritics — `Yogacara` not `Yogācāra`."
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### Level 2: Omission, Mistranslation, Wordiness, Tone, Word Choice
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(漏翻、错翻、啰嗦、语气问题、用词问题)
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**Action**: preferably flag for translator to fix themselves; may also fix
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directly with tracked changes.
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Suggested language:
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- "Did we miss something here?"
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- "This sentence is quite long — could we split it into 2–3?"
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- "The translation here differs from the original. It reads as if the teacher
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is saying X, but I think he means Y. What do you think?"
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- "This word feels a bit strong here — your thoughts?"
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- (After direct adjustment) "I tightened this sentence — does this work?"
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### Level 3: Citation Versions, Slightly Awkward Wording, Marginal Readability
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(引用版本不当、用词稍微不当、阅读体验略差)
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**Action**: flag and discuss with translator.
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Suggested language:
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- "I found another citation version that may be more concise — which do you prefer?"
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- "Could we use this word instead? Might fit better."
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- "Could you take another look at this passage? I feel readability could improve
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but I'm not sure how — your thoughts?"
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## Tone Guide
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- Address the translator as 菩萨 (Bodhisattva) — respectful peer address
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- Use questions, not commands: "Could we...?" "What do you think?" "Would this work?"
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- Frame as collaborative inquiry, not correction
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