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# Edit Suggestions for 78 *Understanding Bodhicitta*
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Translator: AI (self-review)
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Date: 2026-08-06
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## Summary
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Self-review complete. No must-fix issues found. The translation preserves the
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source's 537-line structure, terminology is consistent with the MPI terms
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database, and the speaker's voice (语气) is maintained throughout. Below are
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notes on deliberate terminology choices and minor observations.
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## Terminology Decisions
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### Core terms (consistent with terms DB)
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| Chinese | English | Source |
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|---------|---------|--------|
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| 菩提心 | bodhicitta | Standard Buddhist term |
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| 凡夫心 | ordinary mind | 佛教术语 |
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| 出离心 | renunciation | 佛教术语 |
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| 空性见 | view of emptiness | 佛教术语 |
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| 我执 | self-grasping | DoT preliminary |
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| 胜义菩提心 | ultimate bodhicitta | 佛教术语, DoT定稿 |
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| 正见 | right view | BAICKZ |
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### Contextual renderings
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- **发心**: Rendered as "aspiration" for general contexts, "generate bodhicitta"
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when explicitly referring to 发菩提心. This contextual split is necessary
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because the Chinese term shifts meaning between general aspiration and the
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specific generation of bodhicitta.
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- **法执**: Rendered as "dharma-grasping" parallel to "self-grasping" for 我执,
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maintaining the symmetrical terminology of Yogācāra.
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- **六度四摄**: "Six perfections and four means of gathering" — follows
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established project convention.
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- **愿菩提心 / 行菩提心**: "Aspiring bodhicitta" / "Engaging bodhicitta" —
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standard renderings from Śāntideva's *Bodhicaryāvatāra* tradition.
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### Sanskrit diacritics
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Applied consistently: Māra, Śāriputra, Pūrṇamaitrāyaṇīputra, Śāntideva, Atiśa,
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Tsongkhapa, Mañjuśrī, Kṣitigarbha, Avalokiteśvara, Samantabhadra, Amitābha,
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Bhaiṣajyaguru, Maitreya, Subhūti, Śākyamuni, Milarepa, Dharmamati, Śakra,
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Dharmākara, Lokeśvararāja, Siṃhavikrīḍitapūrṇavikāsatathāgata, *Yogācārabhūmi*,
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*Bodhicaryāvatāra*, *Avatamsaka*, *Lamrim*, *Madhyānta-vibhāga*, etc.
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### Style notes
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- **Speaker's voice**: Venerable Jiqun's 语气 is preserved — first-person
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asides ("I find...", "I believe..."), rhetorical questions kept as questions,
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reasoning connectives ("Therefore", "Thus", "In fact"), concrete everyday
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analogies unvarnished, gentle admonition without scolding tone.
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- **Hinayana**: Used where the source uses 小乘 in pedagogical contrast.
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Consider whether "Śrāvakayāna" would be more appropriate for future editions
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— this is a deliberate choice to mirror the source's register rather than
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impose modern academic convention.
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- **Tripiṭaka**: Sanskrit term kept for 三藏十二部.
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- **Humanistic Buddhism**: Used for 人生佛教 per established convention (cf.
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Master Taixu's "Buddhism for Human Life").
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## No corrections needed
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Three-pass review (accuracy, fluency, Dharma fitness) and R1–R14 editorial
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polish complete. No missing content, no calques, no terminology drift, no
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formatting issues found. Line counts verified: source 537 = target 537.
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