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# Edit Suggestions for 70【佛法要领】
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Translator: model (self)
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Reviewer: model (self)
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Date: 2026-08-06
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## Summary
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Translation is complete and accurate. One proper-name fix applied during review. No
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terminology inconsistencies found. Diacritics and Sanskrit terms used consistently
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throughout.
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## Changes Made
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1. **戒幢佛学研究所** — "Jiechuo Buddhist Studies Institute" corrected to "Jiechuang
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Buddhist Studies Institute" per official English name at jcedu.org. (line 673)
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## Terminology Notes
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Key terms used consistently per MPI terms database (DoT定稿 and 佛教术语 sources):
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| Chinese | English | Source |
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| 出离心 | renunciation | 佛教术语 |
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| 菩提心 | bodhicitta | standard convention |
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| 空性见 | the view of emptiness | 佛教术语/DoT定稿 |
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| 道次第 | the Stages of the Path / Lamrim | standard convention |
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| 三主要道 | Three Principal Aspects of the Path | standard convention |
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| 皈依 | refuge / taking refuge | standard convention |
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| 发心 | aspiration | standard convention |
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| 止观 | śamatha-vipaśyanā | standard convention |
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| 暇满人身 | precious human life (of leisure and endowment) | contextual |
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| 惑业苦 | delusion, karma, and suffering | DoT定稿 |
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| 我执 | self-grasping / self-clinging | consistent throughout |
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| 缘起 | dependent origination | standard convention |
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| 性空 | emptiness of self-nature | standard convention |
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## Deliberate Choices
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- **Renunciation** rather than "disillusionment" for 出离心 — "renunciation" is the
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standard English Dharma term and matches the intended meaning of active letting-go
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rather than passive disappointment.
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- **Precious human life** for 暇满人身 — contextual expansion of "leisure and
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endowment" when the text describes the conditions; the fuller meaning is
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preserved in context.
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- **Three Principal Aspects of the Path** (capitalized, italicized for the text
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title) — standard rendering in English Buddhist literature for Tsongkhapa's text.
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- Verse translations preserve the single-line-per-verse structure matching the
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source, using em dashes for caesura within verses.
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- Chinese Buddhist school names kept in standard romanization (Huayan, Tiantai,
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Chan) rather than translated descriptively.
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## Items for External Review
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- Sanskrit diacritics used throughout (saṃsāra, śamatha-vipaśyanā, Śrāvaka, etc.).
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Verify against project diacritics convention at
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`../mpi-translation/references/diacritics-convention.md`.
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- "Jiechuang Buddhist Studies Institute" — confirm this romanization is the
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project's preferred rendering for 戒幢佛学研究所.
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